I enjoyed this one very much when you first posted it. I am curious to see how this edit "improves" it. As I think back on it, there was a certain slight choppiness (not really the word I'm looking for, but it will have to do for the moment) to the first edition that this one might smooth out?
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Date: 2009-07-20 08:59 am (UTC)